Silencers At Sunrise

[tbs152]

So in this silence i'll ask my self
"is she worth the pain"
An answerless question,
As supposed timeless times past
Hoping this Jack will last the night.
Cause your last kiss is all i can taste

This bitter silence
(A skeleton of a laughter lost)
This bitter silence
(The sound of a missing heart beat)
This bitter silence

A headache and an empty bottle
Are all that acompany me
In a sleepless hello to sunrise
It hurts to never understand anything
But understand everything all at once
Up and about still in clothes of yesterday
No matter you've gone off and away

Missing the feelings
(Your)Hair wrapped around my finger
(Your)Lips, pressed against mine
(Your) warmth in morning

Is it right to miss some who doesnt care


This bitter silence
(A skeleton of a laughter lost)
This bitter silence
(The sound of a missing heart beat)
This bitter silence

So in this silence I'll ask my self
"is she worth the pain"
An answerless question,
As supposed timeless times past
Hoping this Jack will last the night.
Cause your last kiss is all i can taste

Well i should be getting better at this
The game of pretending i dont miss you
Have fun, without me you'll be a success
Just know, to my heart
This silence will melt from your mouth
Its all the relief i'll need

Is it right to miss some who doesnt care
(this is a clever bullet to the back)
For you baby I'll be sure to stand still
(Your locked, loaded and taking aim)
This will be classly heartless kill
A gun shot to ease our silence



let me know what you guys think and if anythings wrong with it

[Scoobydumb56]

i thoguht that it was pretty good, you used the paranthesees pretty good, i live in md too

[decisionpending]

i like the use of the concepts of silence and alcohol in this song but the final section (where you introduce the gun references) does seem a little forced but ending the lyrics the easing of silence was well done... didn't need the violent references though... overall though well done

[IGuessItsOkay]

I agree with the above poster, the gun reference in the end (which is really great) doesn't seem in place in the song. The rest of the song is really good though...amazing even.

[tbs152]

thanks for the good reviews... idea behind the ending was to be a huge curveball to go out on... its lot like Bite To Break The Skin the senses fail song with the crazy break down at the end so with music it makes sense albeit its not as hard a break down as that song which rules

[Micah Aldridge]

So in this silence i'll ask my self
"is she worth the pain"
An answerless question,
As supposed timeless times past
Hoping this Jack will last the night.
Cause your last kiss is all i can taste

1st verse- I would change "As" to "A" in line two, "cause" sounds odd, I would cut it out but add "that" so it read "Your last kiss is all that I can taste"

This bitter silence
(A skeleton of a laughter lost) I would lose the a
This bitter silence
(The sound of a missing heart beat) would missing a heart beat make a sound? think about it
This bitter silence

A headache and an empty bottle
Are all that acompany me
In a sleepless hello to sunrise ?
It hurts to never understand anything
But understand everything all at once
Up and about still in clothes of yesterday
No matter you've gone off and away

last 4 lines in this verse "It hurts to never understand, but I understand everything at once, still in the clothes of yesterday, now you've off and gone away"

Missing the scent
(Your)Hair wrapped around my finger

Missing your touch

(Your)Lips, pressed against mine

Missing the

(the) warmth of you next to me

Is it right to miss some who doesnt care someone?


This bitter silence

(skeletons of a laughter lost)changed it a bit
This bitter silence

(The sound of a missing heart beat)maybe "the absense of a beating hear

This bitter silence

In this silence I will ask myself corrected/changed
"is she worth the pain"
An answerless question,
As supposed timeless times past
Hoping this Jack will last the night.
Cause your last kiss is all i can taste

would change same as above but i'm REALLY lazy

This silence will melt from your mouth
I should be better at this
(Just know, to my heart)
Have fun, without me you'll be a success
(Just know, to my heart)
The game of pretending i dont miss you
(Its all the relief i'll need)

Massive changes, the () indicate a screamo sound in the backgroud, looking for that senses fail sound you like

Is it right to miss someone who doesnt care

changed to someone

this is a clever bullet to the back
(I'll be sure to stand still)
Your locked, loaded and taking aim
(a hanis heartless kill)
A gun shot to ease my silence

And there you go, please don't be offended, this song is strong, and I like it, a lot, but like all songs it needs to be rewritten again, and again and refined, any questions? or you can shoot me an email saltisall@hotmail.com

[tbs152]

thanks for all the ideas i like how alotta things you did sound im gonna go over and just make some small wording changes and the such nothing too drastic cause as it is now i really like how i had it ... i wasnt really going for the whole senses fail sound it kinda goes from like a harder early november sound into a lighter version of a senses fail breakdown at the end but i do wanna add a little more screams to the overall song so thanks for all the imput

[Micah Aldridge]

Muahahahahaha! I will change all the songs! No for real I like it bud, keep on writing

[tbs152]

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