Scavenger

[Bloodshine]

enjoy. . .
i guess. . .


Scavenger

Can you feel the pain
Creep beneath your skin
I am the cause I can inflict
Those wounds deep within
Can you breath or should I
Go Harder
Faster, deeper, I can, I
Go Farther

Drink your cyanide
Anger, hurt, love, and fight
Pressure to come again
Cycle Through Same Trend

Love escapes black hole
I feel more drunk than I feel stoned
No cure just disease
I got out but couldn't leave

Drink your cyanide
Anger, hurt, love and fight
Pressure to come again
Cycle Through Same Trend

Lie
Cry
Try
It doesnt even matter (x3)

[GhostMachine]

I can see where the emotion is going but as far as structure goes, it's rather horribly put together. The first stanza seems rather broken apart to me. Good try but I would tweak it some next time.

[Bloodshine]

very true
It is a wierd song, the first stanza as you put (or verse) is actually like two verses, which its then followed by a prechorus then the second verse (or third if youre really counting), a second prechorus, then the chorus - solo - chorus x2