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wishxfulthinker
10/19/03, 06:55 PM
Waves taste the steel below
The groaning metal as the pressure grows

Their calming rush is all I can hear
A wasteland of liquid surrounds the pier

The sun rises deep in the sky
A streak of orange catches my eye

This sole light is a disturbing hue
The dawn's watercolor shades of blue

I'm holding memories, a folder of fear
I release into the air the pages and tears

From in my hands the pages fly
Circling the water and blurring the dye

Into the water the ink drips like dew
The same darkness and watercolor blue

It's an aching beauty as the pages fell
I hope I feel beauty when I land there as well

The last page falls and catches the breeze
Circles back and falls upon my knees

A single page that has defied the wind
Falls upon my lap with the words "you win".

I've read these words, I've read them all
With the page in hand I begin to fall

para ser libre
10/20/03, 12:58 PM
Nice...I really liked this, i think with the right sound it could be a killer song as well...

punklet2101
10/28/03, 03:19 AM
Originally posted by para ser libre
Nice...I really liked this, i think with the right sound it could be a killer song as well...

my thoughts exactly!!!!

OctoberNights
10/28/03, 05:51 PM
YEAAAAAH MN!

i liked it a lot and it was a cool idea too.
I can be kinda dumb so I dont really get exactly what you mean at the end, but thats kinda the "coolness" of the whole thing. Nice job :)