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heyyou
11/04/07, 08:16 PM
He is sitting so close
I can feel the heat of his body.
Smell the scent of his hair.
Hear his chest expand at the taking in of air.

Everything would be perfect...
except his attention is elsewhere.

He can't see the way my body leans
to be that much closer.
Cant see the longing in my eyes.
the way they trace his every muscle.
his every curve.
His every movement.

We may be close.
But we could never be farther away.
i guess he'll never be mine

heyyou
11/06/07, 08:24 PM
Hey.
so i know this isnt very good.
i want to get better though.
what are some suggestions?

a speedo model
11/06/07, 09:52 PM
Fake? WTF is with all these...

lew_1987
11/07/07, 05:10 AM
Fake? WTF is with all these...

its what pop music does to people.

black rose
11/07/07, 06:25 AM
Shit, I was thinking she was like 13 or something. What 27 year old writes this?

a speedo model
11/07/07, 06:54 AM
its what pop music does to people.
Hahaha, apparently.

lostfear
11/07/07, 09:38 AM
I actually doubt this is fake.

yeah, if one only listens to pop lyrics even at the age of 27 that's what comes out. regurgitated themes, bad imagery and boring plots.

meh.