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wvmcrfan88
11/08/07, 09:05 PM
masochist

i dont deserve what i get
(i dont deserve what i got)
i deserve it all and more
but i cant close the door
i cant tell what is real
why cant my wounds heal?
ive been lost for so long
ive never been more wrong
goodbye
(goodbye)
tell me to stay
tell me to pray
i need a better part
mend my heart
its getting colder now
(its getting colder now)
tell me its alright to cry
please just tell me why
what did i do to lose?
why do i want to die?
i dont deserve what i get
(i dont deserve what i got)
i dont deserve you
(i dont deserve you)
in the night my hatred grew
and somehow you knew
i cry each night to ease my pain
and i lose all control in the rain
why cant my wounds heal?
now i feel my end is near
i get weak when your here
where did you go?
(where did they go?)
i ripped my heart out
i ripped my heart out
i knew id die one day
so i know what youll say
i dont deserve what i get
(i dont deserve what i got)
i deserved all that was given
i was never more driven
my pain grew inside
when my final day arrived
so long fairwell
i leave this life
to be alone in death
as i was in life
i never understood this life
i couldnt see why
noone loved me
and cant i cry
now i shall die

i never said i loved you

chorus
i never said i loved you,
but you know that i do.
its honestly quite true,
i never said i loved you.
you never call,
you never run to me.
why do i fall,
continuously.
every time for you,
you know its true.
i never said i loved you.
but you know that i do.
chorus 2x (whispered)
and all the times before,
when i knocked on your door.
why do i scream for you?
why do i feel the way i do?
i never said i loved you.
but god you know its true.
honey, why dont you,
tell me that it aint true?
chorus 2x (whispered)
id give my life for you.
and honey yes i do.
i never said i loved you.
cause honestly i still do. (screams)
chorus 4x (screamed)
honey cant you see?
what it is doing to me.
darling, you know that i know.
that its too late for a show
honey cant you see?
what it is doing to me.
i never said i loved you.
cause honey, i still do.

RETURN
as sure as the moon will rise tonight,
ill step out of the darkness and into the light.
to live, to die, or just to be?
salvation, please return to me!
ahhhhhahhhhahaa ahhahaaaaaaah!
would anybody even care,
if i choose to be up there?
would it matter if i stay?
since nothin' ever went my way.
should i stay or should i go?
and leave this life, filled with sorrow.
to live, to die, or just to be?
salvation, please return to me!
i sit in darkness, fall into dispair.
im all alone, so unfair!
i didnt know, couldnt see.
never thought youd forget me.
betrayed, forced to hide.
now. im dead inside!
to god i prayed to die.
nothin' left to do but cry.
abandonded by my peers,
surrounded by my childish fears.
salvation, please return to me.
the longer i stay, the faster i fade.
no more the just a passing shade.
salvation, please return to me.
ahhahahhhaaaaa!
am i to be denied?
my soul pushed aside?
all mighty death, leave me here.
to finish out my final year.
my young eyes have seen life's cruel game.
pleasure has its price, and its called pain.
if i live or if i die.
salvation do not pass me by.

coming home to you

i dont mean what i say
i hoped you would stay
but you left me here
so why do i shed tears?
for you were never mine
(you were never mine)
we just ran out of time
id die to know you knew
but its just too late for you
so run my dear and hide
(runaway my dear)
this pain in my heart
is tearing me apart
(tearing me)
tearing me apart
(tear)
tear me
(me)
apart
im tired of running after you
i dont, i dont like you

my sacrifice
in the dark
lies my heart
within a dream
you cant scream
i see you here
so leave my dear
i gave you a chance
to have one last dance
this is my sacrifice
my only chance of life
this is my sacrifice
in my silent bliss
its not you i miss
and your all alone
find your self a home
oh you love to hate me
if you could only see
i never said i loved you
im not lost without you
this is my sacrifice
my only chance at life
this is my sacrifice
all our lives
all your lies
you deceived me
now just leave me
while you hated
i patiently waited
for the death of today
you frightened it away
im not grieving for you
im not bleeding for you
everything i stood for
was thrown out the door
i knew that i was right
when you fled in the night
and with you goes
all my fears and woes
this is my sacrifice
my last chance for a better life
you are my favorite sacrifice

~X~The Birth-Night Ball~X~
I'm so far from you.
I'm so near to you.
I love you dear.
I held you near.
Your pulse dropped,
Your heart stopped.
I can't save you.
{I can't save you}
This time I'm not growing colder.
This time I'm growing older.
I loved you dear,
I held you near.
My only fear,
Is losing you.
My only fear,
Is killing you.
Your eyes are dull,
Your hands are cold.
You took those pills,
To end your thrills.
{I can't save you}
I'm so far from you,
And so near to you.
And I'm alone now.
You showed me how.
As my heart is torn asunder,
You left me here just to wonder.
I love you dear,
I held you near.
Take my hand,
You'll understand.
I'm so far from you,
I still love you.
Your pulse dropped,
Your heart stopped.
I love you,
I love you.
Why can't you see me?
Why won't you hear me?
I call your name,
I feel your pain.
I'll save you too,
Because I love you.
{I can't save you}
Take my hand, my love.
Only you are the one.
I'll run to you every time.
I'll die for you every rhyme.
You know, you were my only love.
And now I'll forever mourn our love.
Does it hurt, that I love you?
Should I leave, to save you?
{I can't save you}
And you know I'm grieving on this day.
I know that there is nothing left to say.
Wake up my dear.
There's no need to fear.
I'm so far away from you.
I love you and,
I understand.
You know it's true,
I'll die for you.
{I can't save you}
I cry for you my dear,
And know it's you I fear.
I'm bleeding for you,
I'm screaming for you,
My love,
My life,
My dear sweet strife.
I can't save you.
I can't save you.
I can't save you.
I won't save you.
I'll see you in Hell.

asmolitor
11/09/07, 02:40 PM
first of all, be proud that you created something, don't assume it's shit.

but the wording could stand to be a little more complex. or at least, have lines with more than 3-5 words.

and the biggest thing i can tell you is - things don't have to rhyme. i had the same problem until the end of high school. once you break the habit of making sure each two lines rhyme, you'll develop as a writer. because then you're concentrating on explaining yourself rather than being handcuffed to a thesaurus and rhyming dictionary.

wvmcrfan88
11/09/07, 07:25 PM
thanks. you have helped me see more to my crap. i really hate my stuff but i like things to be short and simple. and other songs ive written didnt rhyme, and they got such a beating. so thank you very very much.