MY #1 ANGEL x3

[sirdownpour]

My eyes fill with the light of day,
My mouth lets out a scream.
My ears fill with the whispers they say,
I feel a need to redeem.
And all I want is to remember where I lay.

I look past your empty eyes
Into the land your personality disguises
Through the memories eating you like flies
Over the land of the crows and ravens yeah
To the realm where they cant fly

Show me where you hide that drugged out light
Stitch on those black wings and go take flight
This rusty scalpel removes the sin that bite
My number one angel, don’t stop the fight
My number one angel, don’t stop the fight
My number one angel, don’t stop the fight
Don’t stop the fight, Don’t stop the fight

Those things they say aren’t true anymore
If you’d just ask, Yeah
I’d wipe their faces with the floor
I’m your number one Assassin

Take my hand and Fly me out
Let’s bring down any remaining doubt
Let’s mix our blood in the river:
The River of crows and the ravens mount
Yeah,

[sirdownpour]

Bumpity Splat.

[Troggy]

This rusty scalpel removes the sin that bite
My number one angel, don’t stop the fight
My number one angel, don’t stop the fight
My number one angel, don’t stop the fight
Don’t stop the fight, Don’t stop the fight

this alone is cringe worthy.

[leezer]

saying the whole number one thing, I like it but it doesn't work here, you have to be reserved about stuff like that. Is this one meant to

[sirdownpour]

I don't understand, Troggy.What do you mean?

[a speedo model]

Not very good at all, sorry.

[sirdownpour]

It's all good. This is an old one, anyways. At least you were nice about it. =)

[lovely864md]

It's not the worst thing I've ever read. We all write bad stuff at some point. Don't worry about it.

[TK]

It's not the worst thing I've ever read. We all write bad stuff at some point. Don't worry about it.

Word.

Just try reading some good stuff, there are a select few who post great stuff here, I suggest checking some of it out.

As for the piece itself, it's just too immature, cliche, and boring. But I've written plenty of bad stuff, and still do. Just keep writing, and improving.