An Aesthetic of Ignorance

[erccentea]

Images I once cherished now adorn my mind when I seek out the impulse of revenge.
These Polaroid pictures capture the moment of our lust for false hopes.
Intertwining weaves of posturing and lying circles back forming the noose from which we rest our crooked necks.
Sharing pieces of our heart allowed me to see gaping holes of bottomless ignorance defended by your holy aesthetic.
The instances you felt penetration during my quest to touch something pure now seem jaded and cliché.
In your world of calculated euphoria where do I stand?

A suburban monarch, bred with blind hate substantiated by false martyrs.
She now sits in the pew caressing her ego, waiting for the next host to feed her ignorant holiness.

[erccentea]

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[decisionpending]

The third line did not make sense.

"In your world of calculated euphoria, where do I stand?"

The line above, on the other hand, is quite good.

Overall, I think you need to focus on a certain image and expand that, because right now, you are too muddled.

[leezer]

I'd agree with you being muddled. People come to writing lyrics as if they have to say a clever word to that they get top marks, or something along those lines, never mention cliche, suggest the idea with actually saying it, because then cliche becomes a cliche itself and that word is used far to much on this site. The best lyricists don't say things like disestablishmentarianism, they bide their time to use the less used words. I felt when reading this, you were trying to please someone and I think that all music or lyrics, or nearly all, are like that but you really write from the heart and arent trying to apease anyone then no bad comments can hold you back and the emtion really comes through

[strobelife]

There were some good lines in here. The one decisionpending mentioned for example. But at some points it seemed like you were using big words just for the sake of using them.

And I know that this is a short one but I feel like this wasn't long enough. It seemed just like a thought that didn't go anywhere. What I got from this was "you don't like her." Next time just try to write about a few thoughts.