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GREENatarisDAY
11/07/03, 12:33 AM
Flame it or love it

"Heartbreak Radio"

I am sick yes im sick now
sick to my guts and they’re
ready to burst
our lust diffuse into our
bodies
and we lose our minds
in each others eyes

it’s a tragedy how we
sacrifice our minutes
for anothers words
that shoot out past their lips
like a bullet from the barrel
of a gun thats like our hearts
its as lethal as
the last kiss

who would have thought
that just one feeling
could be a recipe
for felicity and suicide
at the same time
as we dive into the black hole
of love and out of loneliness
we suspend everything behind us
and long for ones hand to
grace our wrist
and ravage our despair either
to lead us to the gates
of a haven or our abyss

Touched
11/15/03, 11:22 AM
Very good, I can't see much wrong with it.

Feedback given. :)

GREENatarisDAY
11/15/03, 04:37 PM
Originally posted by Touched
Very good, I can't see much wrong with it.

Feedback given. :)

thank you :)

brandnew_punk_7
11/16/03, 06:55 AM
its good. i like it. you can tell it was written with feeling and those are the best songs...its got a good vibe to it...good use of metaphors too...pece and keep writing and maybe you could check out some of my posts...you might be the only one...later:charming: