anyfeed back would be nice

[rufio242]

And this is how I finish,
behind the starting line,
Forget about me,
I feel that im lost
I've finally run out of time

With my very last breath,
I would die for you,
take 2 to the chest,
1 to the heart,
to put my pain to rest,

Writting this song,
is a way for me to forget about you,
but when you think of me,
I hope your heart will hurt,

I hope you feel that the pain is finally gone,
but when look back at what we had,
Thanks to that locket I gave to you,
I'll live forever as the thorn stuck in your heart,

[Rufio217]

Be creative don't steal others lines



2 to head to remember
1 to the chest to forget



sound familiar oh it's the line you ripped off of teh band who is your avatar non-the less

[decisionpending]

dammit, thought it sounded familar... isnt that the name of their album, seriously, artful appropriation is good when it works but thats just plain stealing... but kudos must go to where it is deserved and that is in the final two lines, nice work there but the rest aint the best

[blink182drumagh]

And this is how I finish,
behind the starting line,
Forget about me,
I feel that im lost
I've finally run out of time

With my very last breath,
I would die for you,
take 2 to the chest,
1 to the heart,
to put my pain to rest,** (just to put my pain to rest)...flows 'better i think

Writting this song,
is a way for me to forget about you,
but when you think of me,
I hope your heart will hurt,** (hurt to) just 2 make it rhyme

I hope you feel that the pain is finally gone,
but when look back at what we had,
Thanks to that locket I gave to you,
I'll live forever as the thorn stuck in your heart,



other than that great song...i actually enjoyed readin that 1 more than others