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brandnew_punk_7
11/21/03, 04:37 PM
Listen carefully and pay detailed
attention to the lyrics of this song
as its as full of pain as the summer
day is long and as hard as knowing
you cant fix what you did wrong

liquify my feelings and pour
the last ounce into a dixie cup
and if need be you can use my selfesteem
like a crutch..since yours is crushed
like glass that cuts my concious when i brushed by you

these words are much like a letter
to heaven to ask god if he
can make things any better
but in the end you know my friend
that its pointless

"dont waste your time
on dreams.....
your face will be washed
by teary streams.....
live and live to die
stay cold on the inside
so that your tears are frozen
before they drip from your eye

take a picture of the look on my
face as you take away the last shred (of happiness)
and take the air out of my lungs
to leave this broken body dead
but i was already gone; verbal gunshots to my head

you say that im your teddy bear
well you can rip my chest wide open
and find that theres nothing there
to show that i ever cared
what use to be heart is gone..to i dont know where


"dont waste your time
on dreams.....
your face will be washed
by teary streams.....
live and live to die
stay cold on the inside
so that your tears are frozen
before they drip from your eye

decisionpending
11/21/03, 05:51 PM
Originally posted by brandnew_punk_7
Listen carefully and pay detailed
attention to the lyrics of this song
as its as full of pain as the summer
day is long and as hard as knowing
you cant fix what you did wrong

stay cold on the inside
so that your tears are frozen
before they drip from your eye

I dont like the self-referential style of lyrics (such as 'this song's for you') but that is pulled off so well in the first stanza. I say stanza cause this is quite poetic and i like that. also the frozen tears line... bellisimo! the rest of it is good without it being to flash but i thought that i should point out those strengths... nicely done, old chap!

brandnew_punk_7
11/21/03, 06:06 PM
i appreciate you opinion....im just trying to write stuff that people can understand....really thanx alot for the info...