Paper Chains and Evergreens.

[punkpixie]

And I know it's unrequited
Because im sitting here by myself,
If it werent I would be out somewhere,
But im home.
Its as if no-one ever cares some more
To show me how, the way to go,
Instead im left to flounder,
Alone.

And aren't we all just preconcieved
I wish that I were more
I count seconds on my fingers as my shadow faults the floor
Its the only thing that keeps me here
From knocking on your door
To hold my breath just once would be,
Enough to be sure.

Chorus:
Does it ever feel like you have no-where to go?
Like the only place thats real
Is the place you'll never know.
I wish that I could give it out
Id give it to you
My heart attack, tin foil and my Christmas card turned blue.

I would wait forever just to wait for you
I would wait forever until you break through
So i'll write this down on every page, until the ink runs out
I'll write this down with this same pen, writing every doubt

Chorus:
Does it ever feel like you have no-where to go?
Like the only place thats real,
Is the place you'll never know
I wish that I could give it out
I'd give it to you
My heart attack, tin foil and my Christmas card turned blue.

And now I know that I was wrong
You knew all along,
I take it back, free heart attack,
I hope that you are strong
And don't expect my Christmas card
Don't you even think
I lost my mind and worst of all my pen ran out of ink.

Chorus:
Does it ever feel like you have no-where to go?
Like the only place thats real
Is the place you'll never know
I wish that I could give it out
I'd give it to you
My heart attack, tin foil and my Christmas card turned blue.

Feedback is goooood!:D

[punkpixie]

Bump!! Come on! this is the first song ive posted, someone must have something to say, good or bad.

[punkpixie]

Where is everyone?:confused:

[xforgetdecember]

I sort of like it.

"I would wait forever just to wait for you
I would wait forever until you break through" - That line reminds me of Something Corporate's style. And some of the other stuff, does, too. May just be me. But if you're getting the same vibe at all, you may want to change that.

"..Like the only place thats real,
Is the place you'll never know" - This line I love.

Including something about writing letters and pens is a bit of a no-no. It's really over done, but that's only something you'd have to heed if you actually cared about.. that factor in song writing.

Sometimes the lyrics seem a little awkward, but I'm sure that may not be the case once applied to music.

Keep on writing. It was enjoyable.

[Touched]

"My heart attack, tin foil and my Christmas card turned blue."

Good stuff.

[punkpixie]

Finally some people! Thanx for the comments, they're duely noted. About the something corporate thing, I wasn't even thinking about that when I wrote it but now you come to mention it some lines do sound like them.:)

[IGuessItsOkay]

I liked it. a lot. seemed to have a pretty good flow/theme to it.

[punkpixie]

Thanx!:D