tormenting memories

[darkpunk]

hey guys. i wrote this one awhile ago and just wanted to get some feedback. take a read and if you have anything to say, just say it. good or bad, very few words, or a whole paragraph. knock urself out. :monkey:


I'm stuck here in this room
forced to relive my memories again and again
Images of you flash across the screen in my mind
Pictures of use together come into focus
Us laughing, us being happy
We were so in love once

Then the pictures start to fade
into the blackness they go
I feel my heart breaking in two
I come into focus
but I'm still faded without you

More pictures burst onto the screen
Me sitting, my eyes red, tissue in hand
You standing there, not caring,
stepping on the pieces of my broken heart
You words paint pictures of you with other girls,
they freeze on the screen
I close my eyes,
but they follow me into my soul

Then the pictures start to fade
into the blackness they go
I feel my heart breaking in two
I come into focus
but I'm still faded without you

The girl in the mirror staring back at me looks like shit
The cracking of her heart echos in her ears
She's calculating, thinking, I'm nothing without him,
I don't deserve to live
The girl in the mirror staring back at me looks like shit
She picks up the blade and makes to go slit her wrist
She screams at his picture, You making me do this!
As a drop of blood falls to the ground,
she sees him standing there

Then the light starts to fade, into the blackness she goes
He comes into focus, but she drifts away
Still fading with him there, she's faded too much,
can't go back now, she's lost to him

He closes his eyes,
but pictures of her begin to flash across his mind,
tormenting his soul...

[punk rock angel]

wow thats fukin narly. it mad me think alot. i can seriously relate to every single one of those words, cuz i just went throught that this summer. yea i liked it alot. i think it was really good. i wish i could write things like that.