heres my lyrics

[Socalkid2141]

nights get lonely
nights get cold
all this acting is getting old
you had me sold
on this thing called love
i felt the push
i felt the shove

thought you were near
you were so far
now i sit here in my car
looking at pictures memories
i hate all the times like these

your out im alone
talking to myself on the phone
the taste of your lips are still on mine
everything is not so fine

in my room wishing you were dying
this thing called hate its multiplying
a new crush
i turn back my back
dignity is what you lack

[Socalkid2141]

hey if u wanna give me some feedback that'd be cool

[thexflamesxburn]

i like the lyrics, but the rhymes are a little cheesy. just try and stay away from the rhyming.

my belief in writing is that you should set yourself up to rhyme, you should write how you feel and not limit yourself to ideas because something doesnt rhyme. if a rhyme happens to fit in a song or poem your writing, then thats awesome! but don't force yourself to rhyme, it limits your creativity, and you wouldn't want to cage in your ability, you want to let it out and use it to its fullest.