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jaytee
11/28/03, 11:23 PM
I just thought id post this and see what people think. Im not expecting much.


This cold and bitter feeling between us,
Like walls pushing apart.
Into this eclectic night I drift away.
The monstorous silence that floods the airwaves impossible to ignore.
The gigantic star splattered blanket above.
A night like this useless when in pain.
When your ribs have collapsed stabbing your heart,
Letting out the love that it once held in.
You'll feel the same.
My numb hands swing with force towards places unknown,
This anger and hate inside has torn me apart.

I'm dying from the inside out,
This world once bright now a dark, cold basement,
with no door or way of escape.
My only sparkle of hope vapourised as you stabbed my soul through the chest.
My hearts left bleeding.

You see me at the front, I see you lock the door.
I scream your name into this dead night.
Only silence screams back, what have you done to me?
I only wanted you. You stabbed my heart with your razor words.
These wounds of mine are only getting worse, the gaping holes never to be repaired.


I'm dying from the inside out,
This world once bright now a dark, cold basement,
with no door or way of escape.
My only sparkle of hope vapourised as you stabbed my soul throught the chest.
My Soul's left bleeding.

Leave your thoughts if you wouldnt mind.

Touched
11/30/03, 11:30 AM
I wasn't too keen on the start of the first verse but it got better, good work.

blink182drumagh
12/19/03, 09:22 PM
i was 2 giddy about half of the 1st verse like the other guy said but its an awesome song....it sounds 2 me like it should be and acoustic...but its urs so more power 2 ya

peace