Word.

[smoove]

I have a messed up mentality because of my fucked up reality.
grew up playing video games with gruesome fatalities.
turn them off and leave the TV on, just to see police brutalities
And murderers walking the streets due to certain legalities
People are getting beat to death because of there sexuality
Fights breaking out, not from different personalities
But instead of different nationalities.
What happened to living life based on moralities?

[resrchmnkygrl6]

Good job...I really liked it.
Definitely a message we need to send.
=D

[Baby VenomVeins]

Forced Rhymes!!
Watch out for that.
This message has also been said a thousand times before in the same cliche way.

[smoove]

Thanks

[salmarnirecho]

it was... okay. I agree with BabyVenomVeins, it's been overdone.

And am I right in perceiving that you're blaming the world for your mentality?

[thegraveyard]

it was... okay. I agree with BabyVenomVeins, it's been overdone.

And am I right in perceiving that you're blaming the world for your mentality?
lmao.

but yea basically what others said, way way way WAY overdone message in a chiche way. if you can find a way to fix this up in a way where it has not been done, let see, a million times before, it will catch more attention. plus, your rhymes.....no. they are forced. its gotta flow. writing takes time, it takes crativity. put a twist into things. write about stuff people have not written about so much. but, keep at it.

[beau blood rush]

it also takes creativity ;)

[TK]

Annoying Rhymes!!
Watch out for that.
This message has also been said a thousand times before in the same cliche way.

Fixed, and I agree with this.

[Baby VenomVeins]

Fixed, and I agree with this.
Haha thanks. Couldn't have said it better myself ;-)