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BrandNewBRE
12/04/03, 05:49 PM
Just for an Instance


Looking into her eyes I’m drained from the thoughts aside
Her hair cascades like a tide
Over her face,
Her thoughts are laced with things to do
I look at her and thought to myself could this be true
A body so natural a feel so pure
It’s like she stepped straight out of nature and through my front door
I am not worthy of this I thought to myself
She is so kind and so full of health
It’s a dream I know it
But life still showed that if was
I could not touch her and feel a buzz
A chill down my spine
I knew now I could not walk in a straight line
As if I was drunk from her beauty
That same beauty could cause such misery


It was a dream but to me a nightmare
This can’t be serene her looks send a tear down my body
Oddly enough this is no bluff
She is stuffed with too much kindness
Causing severe blindness to my eyes
Her aura ties me to her
I prefer to see this from a distance
Now for just an instance

For each step she makes toward my section in the universe
Her body shakes like a maraca to this verse
I’m so ecstatic she is coming my way
I watch as her dress sways and sways
Off her skinny tan legs
Now I can just stare and beg
That the women’s walking will stop
In front of me as my heart flops
If she will speak, her words will be so clear and smart
Without any faint in heart
I will be drawn in like an electro magnet
But a sharp right and off she goes is all I get

It was a dream but to me a nightmare
This can’t be serene her looks send a tear down my body
Oddly enough this is no bluff
She is stuffed with too much kindness
Causing severe blindness to my eyes
Her aura ties me to her
I prefer to see this from a distance
Now for just an instance

Now all I can do is stare
Watch her curves glare
Off the sun
My chance for the day is done
In a way it was fun
To see this women so fair and close
To take her in and get a heavy dose
Of something out of the ordinary
Gorgeous like the song of a Canary
But her entry was as quick as her dispatcher
If she comes back will I catch her?

It was a dream but to me a nightmare
This can’t be serene her looks send a tear down my body
Oddly enough this is no bluff
She is stuffed with too much kindness
Causing severe blindness to my eyes
Her aura ties me to her
I prefer to see this from a distance
Now for just an instance

It was a dream but to me a nightmare
This can’t be serene her looks send a tear down my body
Oddly enough this is no bluff
She is stuffed with too much kindness
Causing severe blindness to my eyes
Her aura ties me to her
I prefer to see this from a distance
Now for just an instance

para ser libre
12/05/03, 04:47 AM
like your previous song, this one when read aloud sounds more of a poem rather than a song. The structure when read reads much more like a poetic piece rather than a song. And allthough I know songs can be poetic, your writing still is more a poet than a lyricalist...

You have some good thoughts and idea,s and i would suggest you mature in your writing style adn just keep posting so everyone can see the changes you make as you grow it your own writing style...