Risk It All..Please read n give me some feed back!!

[PrEtTynPuNkRoCk]

Risk It All

They call me a liar
But I just stretch the truth
They call me a rebel
I'm just livin my youth

They say i'm not what they're looking for
so they look behind another door
I'm sick of always hearing the same thing
When did this hell called my life begin?

CHORUS
I'm not like you, your not like me
Doesn't matter how hard you try
Youre never gonna be
I wanna risk everything
So i wont be the same..
The same as everyone
Who plays that game

You don't like what I wear
You don't like what I do
You talk about me behind my back
Alls I do is just make fun of you

CHORUS

I wanna risk it all, so i dont have to be like you
I'm will to take the fall, so i dont do the things you do
I dont wanna be like you



This is my frist song.. I know its not nearly as good as all the other songs posted, but I'd really like some feeback.. Please!! Thanks...

[Driveitthrough]

There's some good material here to work with, but I can't really find the rhythm of the song -- It doesn't really flow. You need to develop a pattern so the lyrics flow a little more, because right now it's reading really choppy. Keep it up though.

[blink182drumagh]

im not sure f i dont have rhythm or w/e but i think it flows great but that other guy said it doesnt but hey....we havent heard the instrumental so pieces mite be slowed down or w/e

but back on subject....awesome song....its actually better than some of the stuff on here like my stuff