ITS A SONG(that sucks)

[popdisaster530]

Hey, this is a short stupid acoustic song that i wrote in class yesterday, just thought i could share it with you guys.

I dont wanna be cool

VERSE 1
His my name is Wil and i'm the biggest lazy bum
that you'll ever come in contact with but its not that i'm dumb
I'm just overworked and lazy and i wanna go home
id like to hide under the bedsheets and unhook the fricken phone

CHORUS
Cause i dont wanna talk
i dont wanna be cool
i dont wanna go outside and
i dont wanna see you

VERSE 2
Id really like like to leave, but i have to stay with you
if i had enough energy i would get up and move
to some isolated country
where theres no such such thing as money
and the foods free
i need
INSPIRATION

CHORUS
(4x)
END

THats pretty much it (sigh) the rhyming scheme is the same throughout the 1st verse but alters slightly at the end of the second. You could reply either 1. to give my poor song advice, or 2. to cuss me out for wasting your lives with such a terrible peice of garbage. Later:cheeky: :evil:

[Touched]

Umm yea, it wasn't that good.

[TheFallenScene]

I suggest you copyright this song..before! A band such as: Good Charlotte, Simple Plan or Dashboard Confessional, release it on a possible new album.

[para ser libre]

Wow you just earned 103 FREE SCENE POINTS, for the dumbest comment I have ever heard...

[popdisaster530]

THanx for the help guys, your all such bundles of sunshine!:) :) :) :) yea, ill try to get somethin better goin..

[TheFallenScene]

Scene points? Help me out, buddy.

[Driveitthrough]

I think you should have saved yourself some time and not posted this. Why not create something you're proud of and then have it critiqued?