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beau blood rush
03/21/08, 12:33 AM
*song i wrote for a female vocalist, i havn't decided which yet, i think i'll give it to a few and see who does it best


we are a bouquet of bad habits
but you are the florist weaving them

she walks Melbourne city streets,
like business men sell souls carelessly
these empty windows stare at me,
theres more than memories slipping up these sleeves

kid you made a mistake coming here,
i whisper softly in his ear, i whisper softly in his ear

we are a bouquet of bad habits
but you are the florist weaving them
one day, we'll call you a friend

if i was only who they think i am,
i'm the sand when the tides rolling in
i'm the last secret closet
whose locks have been tampered with

kid you made a mistake coming here,
i whisper softly in his ear, i whisper softly in his ear

we are a bouquet of bad habits
but you are the florist weaving them
one day, we'll call you a friend

we are, we are, we are, worse for wear at best
but, we're not, we're not, we're not, ones to give in

i'll throw a line out to the streetlights
to see if they would sing with me

we are a bouquet of bad habits
but you are the florist weaving them
one day, we'll call you a friend
one day we'll call you a friend

JimGray
03/21/08, 06:47 AM
The flow is excellent, though some of the imagery was meh.

Overall though it was good.

Baby VenomVeins
03/21/08, 11:07 AM
I'll sing it.
(jk)

Good as usual.

TK
03/21/08, 02:21 PM
I really liked this, nice job.

beau blood rush
03/21/08, 07:47 PM
thanks buddies.

Russellmcdoogle
03/21/08, 10:00 PM
first thing I've liked in the lyrics and poetry forum. =]

beau blood rush
03/21/08, 11:36 PM
wow thanks tons man :]

music_is_mysoul
03/22/08, 08:57 AM
I thought the chorus was rather beautiful
and just so honest.
she walks Melbourne city streets,
like business men sell souls carelessly
these empty windows stare at me,
theres more than memories slipping up these sleeves
those were my favorite lines.
Poignant and rare.

billyboatkid
03/22/08, 09:03 AM
For some reason I can just hear all your songs being sung. Legit, by bands haha.

You can write some catchy pop-punk songs my friend. I'll give you that.

beau blood rush
03/22/08, 08:49 PM
wow, thanks tons man

missmatilde
03/23/08, 04:54 PM
as Nicole said, your writing is very believable as songs, and something I'll be happy to have on my ipod ;-)