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popdisaster530
12/15/03, 01:48 PM
A cute little tune about people i hate. RESPOND PLEASE!!!!!

WHAT HAPPENED TO DAYDREAMS

VERSE 2
Where do rainbows go
when they shine no longer
where do stars go
when their lights go dim
and where did you go
when you left early
i already know
and it involves him

its amazing how little you have to do
(if feelings are mutual)
but to those who live an unrequited world
(much more work is all ignored)

CHORUS
AND i dont want to think about this situation
actually id really rather go home and cry
and when im done ill buy a gun
and give this guy a little surprise
but then i wake up
oh yea i wake up
as always

VERSE 2
On a good day you tell me i'm quiet
i justt assume you forgot
the number of times
that you've told me to "shut up"
"keep your mouth closed, your head up"
"your young and dont know it"
"its your place to show it"

I dont care if youve heard it
im sick
and it just so happens im tired
of this dictatorship

CHORUS

I WAKE UP AS ALWAYS
(repeat to end)

Please make comments, no matter whether they're to help the song or insult me, either one lets me no people are caring

popdisaster530
12/15/03, 03:42 PM
:rolleyes:

BuriedAlive
12/15/03, 03:53 PM
dude, the first verse was really good. but then i got to the chorus and i was like i dont wanna read this horseshit anymore. then the second verse was pretty good. but the chorus sucked ass. work on it bro. then you will have a good song put together.

popdisaster530
12/16/03, 10:01 AM
Yea, i typed the song as i had it and realized that i had no chorus, so i just typed something in there, i wouldve just taking something from verse 1 or 2 but theyr about 2 different people so it wouldnt make much sense at all, ill work on it