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BuriedAlive
12/15/03, 02:34 PM
"The Last Time"
we spend countless hours in front of this screen
we slowly digest what they want us to believe
(your embedded in my heart, but you've been taken away)
time is such an important part of our society
we are always on the go, forgetting our basic morals
(waiting and waiting, you never came)
we need to look so pretty for this is the last time

the last time I wait outside your window (calling your name)
the last time I sit watching the t.v. (screaming your name)
I'm tired of only having the thought of you and me

you never seemed to have time for me
I was always an inconvenience,
never there when you truly needed me
my life, that I let revolve around you, I had no control
I couldn't find a way to stop loving you
lying on my bed with your pictures in hand
dreaming of those nights we were both in love
but this is the last time

the last time I wait outside your window (calling your name)
the last time I sit watching the t.v. (screaming your name)
I'm tired of only having the thought of you and me

I only feel incomplete without you
you always tried so hard to look beautiful
even though you knew, you knew you already were
you seemed so content on making yourself so much more
that I only began to fade away
but this is the last time

the last time I wait outside your window (calling your name)
the last time I sit watching the t.v. (screaming your name)
I'm tired of only having the thought of you and me

popdisaster530
12/15/03, 03:13 PM
Awesome, as for the title, im gonna guess...the last time??

BuriedAlive
12/15/03, 03:43 PM
Originally posted by popdisaster530
Awesome, as for the title, im gonna guess...the last time??

haha, there isnt a title, but the last time does fit. but i dont want a plain one unless i really need it.

BuriedAlive
12/16/03, 08:20 PM
wow this song must not be all that good. everyone kinda skips it. damn i guess i dont know how to write a quality song.

popdisaster530
12/17/03, 07:39 AM
Naw..if noone can make a suggestion it means its fine how it is

blink182drumagh
12/18/03, 08:33 AM
nice song...is it about somethin in ur life or is it just somethin u dont want 2 happen or wat....great song

BuriedAlive
12/18/03, 09:36 AM
it has happened to me. but thanks for the compliment.

BuriedAlive
12/24/03, 11:37 AM
bump... anyone else have a comment?

BuriedAlive
12/30/03, 12:31 AM
any suggestions... im thinking about coming up with another chorus and switch off with 2 choruses you know switch around. let me know what you think!

popdisaster530
12/30/03, 07:06 AM
Originally posted by BuriedAlive
any suggestions... im thinking about coming up with another chorus and switch off with 2 choruses you know switch around. let me know what you think!

That would definently make the song less redundant and add some variety (as opposed to saying the same thing after every two lines as i always do:goofy:), but at the same time, it might be very confusing, so whatever...

BuriedAlive
12/30/03, 09:15 AM
or i could just add another line to the chorus everytime i sing it... just trying to change it up a bit.

BuriedAlive
01/01/04, 01:12 AM
any other suggestions?

punkpixie
01/01/04, 01:58 PM
On the part that's repeated how about switching the me and you around to you and me, that way the me rhymes with T.V.......... sort of. Depends how you sing it I suppose.

BuriedAlive
01/01/04, 02:04 PM
Originally posted by punkpixie
On the part that's repeated how about switching the me and you around to you and me, that way the me rhymes with T.V.......... sort of. Depends how you sing it I suppose.
actually thank you it does sound better. wow, i never thought of that. thanks alot.

punkpixie
01/01/04, 02:10 PM
No problemo! Now go read my songs, pretty please?:cheeky:

BuriedAlive
01/01/04, 02:25 PM
Originally posted by punkpixie
No problemo! Now go read my songs, pretty please?:cheeky:

ok just cause you asked nicely!