Brand New Song, Please Read And Reply

[popdisaster530]

This is a song, as you can tell by reading it, about basically being a poser. I think its pretty funny because there are soo many people like this where i live, and im probably a bit of one myself so read it and reply.

VERSE 1
i see you walk by
with your black clothes and studs
I see you not care
That people stop and stare
I wish that i could
be just like you
Yea and i would
ride a skateboard too

Yea i love that
stuff you call punk rock
its really loud but
i think its in style
i think ill get a
new wardrobe so ill be
wearing cool clothes
like those guys on mtv

CHORUS
i want a life that i got from a movie
i want a lifestyle thats modeled after yours
i want to be stuck in a constant game of dress up
and then maybe ill be cool. AND THEN MAYBE ILL BE COOL

VERSE 2
i heard a song
on the radio
all about
wanting to know
why people
are all just the same
i thought it sounded
pretty lame

I see no problem
in that certain situation
after all
its not like im a manican
i just wanna be just like you
and imitate all the things you do
i wanna go protest a war
WHY? cuz i heard it a song
i wanna go commit a crime
WHY? cuz the government is wrong

"what? i saw it on tv"i ususally just say that part (rather than sing it)

CHORUS
END

Thats it, comments/critisism/insults/whines/weather report/etc.

[popdisaster530]

please reply

[Micah Aldridge]

Do you write for New Found Glory? lol kidding. pop/punk conformist..

mmm title, the obligatory: "Just like you"

VERSE 1
i see you walk by
black clothes and studs
I see you not care
That crowds stop and stare
I wish that i could
be just like you
Yea and I would
ride a skateboard too

BRIDGE
Yea i love that
stuff you call punk rock
its really loud but
i think its in style
I need some new rags
I'll look, act, and be
like the dude on MTV

PRE-CHORUS
i wanna go protest a war
WHY? cuz i heard it a song
i wanna go commit a crime
WHY? cuz the government is wrong

CHORUS
i want a life that i got from a movie
i want a style that is modeled after yours
i want to be stuck in a constant game of dress up
and then maybe ill be cool. (THEN MAYBE ILL BE COOL)loud echo

VERSE 2
i heard a song
on the radio
Now I wanna know
why people
are content with being the same


I see no problem
in that certain situation
after all
its not like im a manican
i just wanna be just like you
and imitate all the things you do

PRE-CHORUS
i wanna go protest a war
WHY? cuz i heard it a song
i wanna go commit a crime
WHY? cuz the government is wrong

BREAKDOWN
"what? i saw it on tv"

CHORUS

END

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Wow, I made that suck! No really I added what I could in 6 minutes...Gotta get to the movie theater for Lord of the Rings.

[BuriedAlive]

there is no pattern what so ever. the song has absolutely no structure. wow. you really need to work with your songs alot more.

[popdisaster530]

harsh:evil:

[para ser libre]

Wow, being brutally honest....

REALLY BAD

nothing flows, there is no structure, everything is wrong, the song reads like a very bad poem with shallow meaning...

[blink182drumagh]

Originally posted by para ser libre
Wow, being brutally honest....

REALLY BAD

nothing flows, there is no structure, everything is wrong, the song reads like a very bad poem with shallow meaning...

its like ur soo fuckin mislead its hilarious.....y cant u say one pesons song is good...wat r u that *** judge from american idol...dude this song is prolly better than any shit ull write...face it

peace

[xAlexisonfirex]

Originally posted by blink182drumagh
its like ur soo fuckin mislead its hilarious.....y cant u say one pesons song is good...wat r u that *** judge from american idol...dude this song is prolly better than any shit ull write...face it

peace

PUNK!

OI!

OI!

[GREENatarisDAY]

I dont get some people these days. This song could be good if you didnt make it so fuckin literal. Sure if ya wanna write for some 12 year olds they might enjoy this. But this is an AP forum, the home of cynical assholes that love to crush people like you for things they write like the piece of garbage that started this thread. This song sounds just like a song for a pop punk band. I agree Micah Aldridge do you write for Good charlotte or something.....

But honestly if you wanna posts songs like this dont do it in hear unless you are ready to be flamed. If you want to thats fine, cuz i enjoy doing it



:D

[TravvPoopington]

I guess it's nothing TOO offensive, but it sounds just like every other song you see MTV whoring these days. This isn't your writing, this is your interpretation of a shitty Good Charlotte song. Come back when you've come up with something you actually have an opinion about, and not just because it's the cool thing these days.