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MisTakeOfTheYea
12/20/03, 01:24 AM
There is no longer a fire inside
We've gone cold to the core
No one is here to hold us near
Relight the fire,
Help to hold are head up higher

The fire that went out from within
wont be lit again (again)
to much got burned from within (within)
we are no loger able to raise are head
or take a stride like we belong
(never)

So here we will stay
cold to our core
in are lie called life
never to raise are head,
to feel pride.
Somthings just aren't ment to be
so we are left here to die in are agony.
( to die)

tell me what you think good or bad I don't care.... Just want to know what you think..

IGuessItsOkay
12/23/03, 09:28 PM
I like it...the spelling is kind of off, so it took me a little while to see what you were saying (you used are and it should be 'our'). but other than that, I like it...I like its simplicity.

TravvPoopington
12/24/03, 12:16 AM
Thumbs up dude, that's some pretty good writing.

lollirot
12/24/03, 11:30 PM
Wow! That could be an anthem for angsty apathetic teenagers!

GREENatarisDAY
12/26/03, 12:04 AM
its very good :)