i thought i'd post one of the songs i wrote for my band just for fun

[drainlife]

i'm a horrible speller so if words are misspelled i know and dont care.

Angel of sin
verse
As I stare I find my self ashamed
of this thing Looking back at me
I have becomeFull of hate my dear
I want u gone but need u so near

chorus
I don’t see the world the same as I did before the pain
I know this anger builds in side for u
And I’ll need it to
To see the evil in your eyes

An angel’s face commits a demons sin

verse
What we had is it all a lie the things u did u cant dyne
I should have seen through the lie
But I can’t seem to fix this void with in

chorus
I don’t see the world the same as I did before the pain
I know this anger builds in side for u
And I’ll need it to
To see the evil in your eyes

An angel’s face commits a demons sin

bridge
Now I cry to escape
the valley of my heart
Do you fight with in?
Hate u I should but love u i do
u don’t seem to love me anymore
I should have seen, the signs were all there
But in my mind I didn’t really care

chorus
I don’t see the world the same as I did before the pain
I know this anger builds in side for u
And I’ll need it to
To see the evil in your eyes

An angel’s face commits a demons sin

[blink182drumagh]

im not really understandin about wat the song is about...angels and demons is all im guessin...im sry but that is somethin i just dont like...but keep writin...

[punkpixie]

"An angels ace commits a devils sin"- this line/theme is great.
However some of the lines in the verses seem a little forced, but with music it would probably sound good. Id like to hear it.

[saving face]

i think this song is actly really cool. got a good theme which you stick to throughout. i agree with punkpixie, with music i think this could sound really cool. i get like a senses fail vibe off it which is cool, theyre one of my fave bands and cant wait till the new album comes out!

but defo keep up the writing! :cool: