To Whom It May Concern:

[Dobs]

i write a lot of music but my lyrics are ordinarily quite suckish and are used to fill in space... however ive been trying to change that latley and i think that this particular song is halfway decent... let me know if im right at all

thanks

To Whom It May Concern:

Quite frankly, I don’t care
About your point of view
It doesn’t concern me
And now I’ve caught on too
So nice to be acquainted
With the really real you

Did you expect me to believe?
That you were sincere?
And I know now who you are, who you’ve become
I’m not the only one right here

Your deception disgusted and depressed
It destroyed and distressed
Congratulations, mission accomplished
You’re the best

You came, you saw, you conquered
You gently dismantled, kindly unhinged
All the while, with a smile
On that pitiful excuse for a face

I suppose we are partially to blame
We smothered you, wouldn’t let you grow
It didn’t extinguish the flame
The one you used to burn this bridge
The one you started with the spark
That pleasant little spark

Did you expect me to believe?
That you were sincere?
And know now what you are, what you’ve become
I’m not the only one right here

I write this letter to you now
To explain to you just how
I cannot stand you, get out now

You’ll never get back in
You’ll never get back in
You’ll never ever get back in

If you’ll excuse me, I must be going
Yours truly,
Your dearest friend,
Me

[beau blood rush]

i really think that's a good choice of song title

[thesafeword]

I feel like the first verse was too choppy, some of those lines could've been connected.

[JimGray]

Not concerned.

[Dobs]

yea i like the title too, and i agree that the first verse is....not so good, ill work on it

thanks guys

[no_philistine]

You're sixteen and all you can do is improve. Keep taking suggestions and you will get better. These others gave sound advice. I would stay away from cliched adages like you came you saw you conquered. Just a suggestion.

[Dobs]

dont worry not takin anything personally

thanks a lot guys, ill try to keep this stuff in mind when i write another....like i said, my lyrics are normally bad cus i just dont pay attention to them, but i'm gunna actually take time to make them acceptable from now on

thanks again for the feedback