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popdisaster530
12/31/03, 07:38 AM
This is about a kid that lived near me whos dad was preacher. And they had to move away cause he became obsessed with a girl in the church and started stealing her clothes and shit. PRetty screwed up dude.

VERSE
I might not feel the pain from a perspective
of a guy thats lost faith
but i Always knew it wouldnt come to this
why do you constantly make me a liar

You cant reject me were too damn close
at least thats how it is in my dreams
Its getting harder and harder
to seperate the false

CHORUS
SHovel in my hand
Im digging to heaven
ill look you up
when i fall asleep
(you know i will)

VERSE
Im not leaving I'm retreating
to a new battlefield of opportunity
But theirs noone like you there
unspoken goes the solution

How about a goodbye kiss
you know this was all for you
you never understood me
this is the least i could do
END

thats it so far. I dont know if i like it or not. Its kinda short so ill build onto it later. please comment!!!!!!!

popdisaster530
12/31/03, 03:23 PM
any comments?????????

popdisaster530
01/01/04, 08:22 AM
bump, someone comment!!!!!!!:confused:

BuriedAlive
01/01/04, 11:20 AM
"Im not leaving I'm retreating
to a new battlefield of opportunity"

thats the only part of the song i liked. the rest was half as good. it needs some work.

xxMichaelxx
01/01/04, 08:22 PM
what you got so far is gold, but it definitly needs more substance. keep her goin