kind of scared

[jaycougar]

ok this is the first tim I have let alot of people see my work. Any comments would be great.


I canot find the road I walk on
The letters you sent are so empty,
Full of words you dont mean,

The I love yous
the hugs and kisses
Get blown away in the wind,

The midday walks the midnight meetings
get washed away in my mind,
A void not filled a room so empty
Lost and gone but not forgotten
How will i ever find my way.

(its not done yest but what do u think)

[jaycougar]

can anyone respond and give a comment?

[xxMichaelxx]

it definitley needs to be longer, but its stupid to say that b/c you said yourself it isnt done yet, i like what you have so far, but definitly keep working at it