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Ashantell
05/14/08, 12:41 PM
Some lyrics... ^^ Mind, this is a working version... I mean I'm stil changinf things and yeah. So what do you think? :P

Love issues

Before...
I thought I couldn't
but I kissed you.
When it passed...
I thought I wouldn't
but I missed you.
Even though…
I knew I shouldn't,
… I loved you…
And I still do… /Is interrupted/

/Mate, listen…/
You know that you SCREWED HER BEFORE
You know that you can SCREW HER AGAIN
You know when she WALKED OUT THE DOOR
You shouldn’t ‘ve LET YOURSELF CRAWL…/is interrupted, music slows/

But now …
Who’s gonna hug me when I’m sad…
Who’s gonna calm me when I’m mad…
Who’s gonna kiss me… love me back… /is interrupted/

/NO, mate, listen…/
You know that you SCREWED HER BEFORE
You know that you can SCREW HER AGAIN
You know when she WALKED OUT THE DOOR
You shouldn’t ‘ve LET YOURSELF CRAWL…/is interrupted, music slows/

You see…
By now… I’d have crossed you.
For, how…When I still crave you.

You see…
How can I be strong when you’re not there?
When you used to take away despair…
And…

/NO, wait, mate, listen…/
You know that you SCREWED HER BEFORE
You know that you can SCREW HER AGAIN
You know when she WALKED OUT THE DOOR
You shouldn’t ‘ve LET YOURSELF CRAWL…/is interrupted, music slows/
NO…
So now you must TRY TO IGNORE her
So won’t you TRY THAT, YOU SWORE
So now will you PULL YOURSELF BACK
So now are you BACK ON THE TRACK?!

/…Mate?... MATE!... /

/silence/

Before...
I thought I couldn't
but I kissed you.
When it passed...
I thought I wouldn't
but I missed you.
Even though…
I knew I shouldn't,
… I loved you…
And I still do… /mate gives up./
Ashantell
05/16/08, 10:42 AM
Can you give your critiques? :P
GhostMachine
05/16/08, 11:34 AM
Serioiusly...try not to rip off The Streets
Ashantell
05/16/08, 11:59 AM
Seriously... I'm guessing thats a group or watever... But I haven't heard of it... oO
GhostMachine
05/16/08, 12:17 PM
Let me put it in simpler terms...this is complete crap in my opinion. It's an over used topic without any originality to it. You wrote maybe 5 sections and then repeated the others so many times that it quit being something above crap and lowered itself below that. AND TURN OFF THE CAPS KEY...there isn't a point writing like that.
Ashantell
05/16/08, 12:23 PM
Got it... CAN you shut up now? You're a really horrid person to hear critiques from :D
GhostMachine
05/16/08, 12:26 PM
I'm actually being nice right now...I can be horrid, but I don't feel digging into your personal life.
Ashantell
05/16/08, 12:29 PM
OU , I'm scared :P But I asked you something... So will you? ^^