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evanbythebay
06/01/08, 02:10 AM
These are the first lyrics I've ever written/posted, not that this matters, just sayin

The spacing got all messed up when sending it from sidekick to gmail, I tried to fix it as much as possible

Constructive Criticism is appreciated in any shape or form, even if its a fail gif


Song 1

remember when you said "god bless this mess."
i took it out of context and took a needle to my arm, not to scratch or scrape, to levitate, to
find the "great" im missing out on, or because im missing you.
these are not eggshells you walk on theyre empty beer cans, and corners of magazine papers folded into envelopes, to send love notes.
the edges have been scraped clean, 'cause im a fiend. addicted to two, nodding off & You.
where my mind is at a higher place and you could be high in my
arms, you can wish to walk on the clouds and i will lead the way.
you can come home from dreaming, and walk all over the rules and all over me.
a busy bee, free basing breakfast, lunch & dinner and crawling under the sheets for dessert.
where i can find you passed out & glowing, ill tuck you in, but ill keep you here.

Song 2

I've got everything you'll ever need, you're only a world away, so pack
all your knick knacks and truly this time, "come home." I hear the roads
have worn you out? I'll give you something to write about, there's
spider webs between my legs, don't be afraid. We all have been awaiting
your arrival. I'll clear the dust, you take control, breathe easy for me
sunshine, dont break the ice just now. we can melt here for as long as
you like. ill pass you your drink and light every ciggarette, if you'll
share your needles and two tenths. ill spell your name out of straws and
trash them all, i dont want to make love, i want to " Get off " we can
kiss and make up later. your porcelain doll has been anything but
precious but shes fought to stay pretty. between the bright lights and
the dirty city there is a house with a light on always waiting for you
to come home.

Song 3

Let's see.
hand-me-down-handjobs
she was in a bad position
and he had time to count his change
they were living off of burnt toast and passion
the world was different and they couldn't find their own place
the gutter was crowded and they were being lapped in eternities race
never lost hope until he found a hole in his pocket
he never let go until he knew she couldn't love him
it was a cold night and you could here them coming
the cracking ankles of the restless and the radiators moaning and
humming
getting right to the point we lost it all and still thought everything
besides the point was funny
no comedians were present but the whole crowd ended up out of their
chairs clapping
the show at the moment was about to be everything we've ever wanted
nights met ends and said their farewells to the stars as it became
morning
we watched the sun take it's place and shine light onto our planet
it was some clever joke because we still couldn't feel our hands in our
pockets
went in closed doors to thaw out under the artificial heating
this was a cycle that repeated itself with out flaw constantly

Timma
06/01/08, 10:06 AM
the first one was pretty good. the other too i didn't care for but that's just because it's not the style song that i listen to. i think all you need for the first song is a chorus. good luck!