The River

[chaosB4storm]

The River

Listen like you would to heaven’s words
In place of my own
To tell the same story
And fight like you would for a cause
A cause that you care for
More than you care for me

If you’re losing faith in your hand
Then take mine
And hold it with eyes that promise you can read minds

And it will be a lie
A sign of lost love
A weeping willow
And I will find shade wherever I go

You’re the comfort I can’t find
When my sins won’t let me sleep
You’re the calming of the waves
Where the water won’t let me breathe

I’ll wait for you by the shores
Buried without trophy or sword
As you anchor your ship at sea
And never come back to me

We’ll take this one to the river
Trust me

[stendhal]

considering the subject matter is trite, i think you tackled it well.

i'd like to see you write something of a different nature.

[chaosB4storm]

Thanks, and yes, i try to stay away from this subject matter as much as i can. but you know, I write whatever I'm feeling at the time.

Thanks, though.

[chaosB4storm]

bumper cars

[ak4]

i believed you tossed my poems apart for being emo...isnt that so?

i stopped reading after the first line..boring

[chaosB4storm]

no that didnt happen actually, you sarcastic peice of shit...i defended ur songs because they were emotional.

thanks for the dishonest opinion of my poem though

[vandalsandquinn]

all I read was the title and I just wanted to say it shares it's name with a bruce springsteen album. BRUUUUUUUUCEEEEEE!!!!

[chaosB4storm]

lol thanks for your input :)

[Nior]

you tied the lines together nicely and had a few of those weird metaphors i like this doesn't make sense on the surface which is great in my opinion i like artful nonsense

[chaosB4storm]

you tied the lines together nicely and had a few of those weird metaphors i like this doesn't make sense on the surface which is great in my opinion i like artful nonsense

thanks Nior, never thought I'd see the term *artful nonsense* within a compliment, but I know what you mean lol. Thank you for the comment.