*blush*

[falling_star]

this is the first poem i've written since middle school, but yeah.. i had to let out my feelings somehow or another! criticism will be GREATLY appreciated =]

I’ve come out from my cloud for you to see me
You will see me, won’t you?
I’m falling fast and hard for you to catch me
You will catch me, won’t you?

I’m tired of burning up in the sky without being able to hold you
be held by you
catch me and let me burn for you
and you only

I’ve let go, I’m free falling
Everything’s a blur
City lights, and the waving leaves all blend into one confusing dream
Only one thing is clear, and that is you
only you can save me
Will you save me?

I’m as fragile as glass
But there’s nothing else I would rather do
Will you hold me?
Or will you let me break and shatter?

Hold me, and comfort me.
It’s been a rough trip down.

[open mind]

i like it,and you don't use weird metaphors or anything so you never lost me.

[falling_star]

ah, thanks.. =]
im really inexperienced at this, but yeah.. anybody else have any suggestions, comments, criticisms? anything?