storm warning

[decisionpending]

storm warning.... give us some feedback please... much appreciated

the heavens will put on a light show for us tonight
if you look out to sea, its better than fireworks (exploding on new years eve)
the rain will not tumble and the air is chilled
adrenilin fills my bloodstream as the thunder breaks upon us

electricity between us
stormin up the frequency
doesnt matter, dont have to listen
we both know what we need

does lightning ever strike in the same place twice?
i dunno, but i we seem to be having the same argument again (deja, deja vu)
and your voice will scream like thunder, and our tears will fall to floor
steam rises as our rain puts out the flames we once had

electricity between us
stormin up the frequency
communication breakdown
static will prevail

the passion will never last
the lust will always pass
like a storm we've blown ourselves out
and we cant it back together
dont let the wind blow you away
as i slam the door in your face

the storm has passed away and resigned itself to yesterday
damage my have been done but its time to move on
there are always more storm to come
there are always more to come...

[UrOwNdIsAsTer11]

Hmmmm... I like the chorus alot, partly because it seems so misleading at least my interpretation... The verses could have a better flow to them, they seem a little disjointed. The bridges do a nice job at the end of wrapping things up... I'd give it about a 7/10... You might wanna proofread a little more to catch the little mistakes throughout and to get an idea of whether or not it flows...

Keep working, you'll get there :)

[decisionpending]

yo man, thanks for the input. i know that i have to do some work on the verses because they dont really fit into the music that i've set... mainly just wanted to know if the imagery and the theme was strong enough to support a song in y'all collective opinion, more commentary would be great