Depression

[Jabble524]

Depression

Piranhas swim under the ice
Where my mentality is trapped
Depression swims under the ice
Where my mentality is snapped

Counterfeit radiance
Soothing eloquence
Corrupt elegance

Raptors hide among the flames
Where my serene thoughts are trapped
Suicide hides among the flames
Where my serene thoughts are snapped

Counterfeit radiance
Soothing eloquence
Corrupt elegance

Depression Banished

From my mentality-
Demons are banished
And suicide has vanished

Depression exorcised
Cause you love me
My mentality rests in a field of roses

From my mentality-
Flames are extinguished
And misery is extinct

Depression exorcised
Cause you love me
My mentality rests in a field of roses

Depression banished-
And my mentality rests in a field of roses
Depression banished-
Cause you love me

Misery is extinct
And suicide has vanished
Cause of our love

Kisses Indicate

I can leave the place where time stops
Just outside reality
I can leave the place where time stops
Material paradise vanishes

Censored screams whispered
They're spectacular with the vernacular of confusion
Kisses indicate the illusion
There's correlations between your lacerations

Watch the sunrise
And fall asleep in your arms
Coffee kisses at sunset
And wake me from my dreams

Censored screams whispered
They're spectacular with the vernacular of confusion
Kisses indicate the illusion
There's correlations between your lacerations
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[Brandon Allin]

Hahaha. This is terrible.

[TK]

X-)

[Jabble524]

Thank you to those who took the time to read and respond to my poetry. I truly appreciate it.
- Jabble

[Burning Star IV]

Piranhas are tropical fish. There's no ice in the inter-tropical zone. Go read a book.

[Sventhegreat]

Piranhas are tropical fish. There's no ice in the inter-tropical zone. Go read a book.

/thread

[YouthMovement]

uuhh... not so strong

[SuNDaYSTaR]

Okay, but all of this seems pretty cliché to me. Maybe you could work on the ''unpredictability'' of it, if you get what I mean.

[Jabble524]

That is a good idea SundayStar. Thanks for the feedback.