BLACK & WHITE COLOR PALETTE FOR MANNEQUINS (PRETTY ODD INSPIRED SONG) feedback please

[Nior]

http://boards.fueledbyramen.com/groupee_common/platform_images/blank.gif (http://boards.fueledbyramen.com/artists/panicatthedisco/forums/a/tpc/f/8241060068/m/88710148511?r=88710148511#887101485 11)first let me say hello to everyone a little bit about myself i guess a few of my favorite artist are kanye west, M.I.A., daft punk, fall out boy, panic at the disco, big sean, drake (the kid from degrassi lol), rihanna, and jon brion heres a song i wrote using the "pretty. odd. format" you know sounds really ambiguous and happy super confusing but has a deep meaning lol well here it is anyone who reads it tell me what you think about the song and what you think its about

White and black color palette for mannequins

Well were at it again, O What a ghostly tint
Shared between eccentric friends
What a carnival, it won’t be long
The dandelions are singing my song
What a joyous tune, between us two, O just me and you

Looking back after doing the math
Yes if we look back we can only laugh
We can only laugh it’s the best thing to do
Well we sure fooled you
Yes we sure fooled you

Don’t mind being wear the grass is blonde
Keep your hand off that horn
This is were I belong
Please don’t count to three
O how you unique
You’re pulling our card
Well aren’t you smart
Wasn’t it obvious?
Guess you’re not all that smart were just doing our job
We made it easy its not hard doing our job

Looking back after doing the math
Yes if we look back we can only laugh
We can only laugh it’s the best thing to do
Well we sure fooled you
Yes we sure fooled you

[thespearkid]

Have you recorded this a song anywhere?

[chaosB4storm]

you do not write like any of ur inspirations in my opinion lol

saying that, these lyrics are better than what i expected after reading your favourite bands.

decent job.

[Nior]

Have you recorded this a song anywhere?

thanks no i have not recorded anywhere i really want to though i definitely want to incorporate music in my bigger picture but anyone can talk so ill shut up on that note

[Nior]

you do not write like any of ur inspirations in my opinion lol

saying that, these lyrics are better than what i expected after reading your favourite bands.

decent job.

thanks lol really i swear up and down i am writing like the artist i am trying to emulate/inspires me in the moment i guess thats a good thing though

[TK]

Not bad

[chaosB4storm]

thanks lol really i swear up and down i am writing like the artist i am trying to emulate/inspires me in the moment i guess thats a good thing though

of course it's a good thing, keep writing for sure.