Sometimes at the cost of other's hopes

[maybe_mayhem]

Prepare yourselves, this poem will blow you away!

Silent as a Tomb-

The sun never graced my skin on a night like
this. As the burn appears delicate but soothing,
the streetlight dims to a familiar shade to the
point that we can all empathize. A councel of moths

gather to share the gleaming rays giving warmth
to few. One by one they pause to spectate my hands,
grasping unbearable pain conceived by a black
figure marching into the night. Shivering

eyes catch glimpse of sharded glass that pierce
the ocean air left far behind. Days away from the
grass filled hill that screamed your innocense
leaves me uneasy knowing this massacre will bring us

closer. My time is now better spent perched on this
cloud at the company of fallen angels. Don't worry,
you'll join me soon. The burn has faded and I am free.

[xXPunk033]

Not bad.. didn't exactly "blow me away" though, but it's not bad..

It sounds like a song I've heard a dozen times before though.. but its still not bad..

[maybe_mayhem]

hmmm.......i was hoping people would notice the sarcasm but oh well. Thanks for the feedback though, this is one of my first ones on which i was experimenting, hence the sarcasm.