love

[xmy.only.exitx]

the heartiness of a new day
the promise of a promise
the clouds they'll stoop to pick us up
and our fears will all just fall away.
nothing will matter more than you
i'll love more than my heart can take
even angels will be wondering
who's coming now to take their place.
i'll show you what love was meant to be,
give every hidden joy that i can find,
and at every corner of your broken heart,
i'll try to leave my name behind.

[checkered.stars]

I think you can do without the first two lines, seeing as how they're quite hollow. Maybe you shoulld work on streamlining your words better too, but the last line is nice.

[chaosB4storm]

That poem was Gwyneth Paltrow. lol

[checkered.stars]

Haha what?

[chaosB4storm]

lol that is my way of saying good job.

like : 'Man, this pizza is Gwyneth Paltrow!' he said enthusiastically.

My friends all hate me because I have them saying it now lol.

[checkered.stars]

Ohh I thought you meant that it was originally written by Gwenyth Paltrow and it confused me haha.

[chaosB4storm]

Lmao nope. My post makes a lot less sense than what you thought lol.

[xmy.only.exitx]

thanks a lot, guys for the warm response. i'll try to do better next time.

[JessieVain]

its a nice poem :D
but yeah maybe the first two lines can be gone.