lost connection by my BFF caiti!

[brknhrtdbritt]

i wait by the telephone just to make sure you won't call
the hurt you unwilling supply is making me stronger but
my heart is growing weaker and breaking as you try to fix it
if you want me don't tell her you want her when you leave my arms for hers
you lay in bed looking in my eyes while my eyes are staring right through you
and your lies
your like my life guard trying to drown me in my pool of tears
my best friend that is stabbing me in the back while hugging me
i try to walk away but your smooth words are faster than my feet
im wasting my time trying to be your everything when your everything is you
i hope she makes you feel good because she is killing me
and to the girls who think he is yours... he never will be... you can't own
the ones who only cage you.


my friend wanted me to post this for her... hope you like it

<3 brit & caiti

[GhostMachine]

It was hard not to laugh when I read this...and I know that's a rude thing to say but oh well. The flow on the piece is horrible, the complete idea is crap, and its even more unoriginal than the normal broken hearted shit.

[TheSkyline]

i wait by the telephone just to make sure you won't call
the hurt you unwilling supply is making me stronger but
my heart is growing weaker and breaking as you try to fix it
if you want me don't tell her you want her when you leave my arms for hers
you lay in bed looking in my eyes while my eyes are staring right through you
and your lies
your like my life guard trying to drown me in my pool of tears
my best friend that is stabbing me in the back while hugging me
i try to walk away but your smooth words are faster than my feet
im wasting my time trying to be your everything when your everything is you
i hope she makes you feel good because she is killing me
and to the girls who think he is yours... he never will be... you can't own
the ones who only cage you.


my friend wanted me to post this for her... hope you like it

<3 brit & caiti

I bolded the parts I didn't like.

[chaosB4storm]

i wait by the telephone just to make sure you won't call
the hurt you unwilling supply is making me stronger but
my heart is growing weaker and breaking as you try to fix it
if you want me don't tell her you want her when you leave my arms for hers
you lay in bed looking in my eyes while my eyes are staring right through you
and your lies
your like my life guard trying to drown me in my pool of tears
my best friend that is stabbing me in the back while hugging me
i try to walk away but your smooth words are faster than my feet
im wasting my time trying to be your everything when your everything is you
i hope she makes you feel good because she is killing me
and to the girls who think he is yours... he never will be... you can't own
the ones who only cage you.


my friend wanted me to post this for her... hope you like it

<3 brit & caiti

bold - it was bad

italics - it was ok

underlined- it was good

AVOID USING CONTRADICTORY STATEMENTS UNLESS THEY ARE GOOD ONES. lol