White Rabbit New Song Lyrics

[White Rabbit]

I was born as a seed , i had fallen from this tree and on my head fell an apple , i discovered gravity and held as a child , fragile ribcage softer smile and to my hands came comforting , but its not so comforting now.

Darling dont whisper like you do , because im just too far away though ive been following you.

We speak in comforting sentances , it helps me sleep , it helps me to breathe in everything , and keep me safe , somewhere warm , where i can wake.

I am water and sand colder smile callas hands , softer lips project a voice that breaks apart , but it echoes.
We are weak we are sly , weve fermented with the wine that turned our beating hearts into broken machinary.

This is lovers between the sheets whispering everything. "i love you" "i miss you"
This is how we wrote our names upon the walls of forgoten towns , theyl have to listen to us now , theyl have to listen.

[chaosB4storm]

I would suggest you structure this like a poem just so it's easier to read and capture the flow. I would also suggest that you avoid spelling mistakes. You can have a good poem, but if you have a lot of spelling mistakes a lot of jerks on here won't give you a chance lol.

That said, I really enjoyed this poem (probably more than about 90% of the stuff I see on here), and I would like to see more from you.

Give it a title too.

[leezer]

I liked reading this piece. A little awkward structurally but that kind of made me read it. good job