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[motioncitysound]

i would appreciate any feedback you have, thanks

different states, its killing my game
my body aches, wonder if you’re felling the same
your in my thoughts, always in my dreams
and i’m not sure how this seems (I miss you)

but nothing, can stop my mind
not even our, our different time
from rushing home, just to dream you
seeing your eyes, the prettiest of blue

(chorus)
is it wrong, wrong 4 me
to get excited, to fall asleep
in my dreams, were holding hands
doing everything we’ve planned (it’s perfect)
is it wrong, wrong 4 me
to get excited, to fall asleep
in my dreams, were walking slow
enjoying everything as we go (so perfect)

alarm goes off, I’m awake
wishing that, it came on by mistake
why can’t these dreams, just come true
can’t stand the thought, not holding you

but things are not, not working out
different schools, and I doubt
that I will get, to see you real soon
so my days now, begin at noon

chorus

don’t, want to wake up
I can’t, get enough x4

[failedbullets]

Haven't heard one like this before, but just reading it is kinda wired as you don't have many connecting adjectives in, so lines like "to get excited, to fall asleep" sounds a bit contradictory. But I'm sure it will/does sound good with music.