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The Rush
07/08/08, 08:55 PM
Yeah, we all like to sleep
and we could never start to soon
With restless eyes wide open
This nightmare starts at noon

I won't miss you
Or the things you said before
You've taken most of what I have
And this clever word's one more

The butterflies have turned to bees
the scenery has burned
The color in the art is gone
and the artist won't return

The monsters in the canvas take
They take too much, like you
Homemade bogeymen don't rest
til the papers have bled through

I won't miss you
(or the writing on the wall)
I won't miss the things you said
The artist that we rendered
The painting I recall

We burried the beautiful
on a cold, darkened eve
In a box as black as night
so the sinners too can grieve

Scream, while the nightmare feasts on the day
Scream, so they hear you and take you away

chaosB4storm
07/08/08, 09:09 PM
Great imagery, flow, idea, and diction.

the best you've written.

The only thing I could say negative about this is that from stanza to stanza its a little *bumpy*, but within each verse is smooth