Murder the Day

[ForgetThisLoser]

In the darkest that I've ever been
Reflect the streetlight off my tears
And every second that daylight lingers...
My heart refuses to run upon its gears..
I'm counting all the reasons why it hurts..
but I'm running out of fingers..
Sooner or later I'll number off the stars..
And maybe then I'll kill this doubt...
Each digit makes me feel much safer...
And I was feeling fine..
Until I ran out...

Poke these pins inside the sky
Let me see a little light
I don't ask for much
Just enough
To let me know the suns still alive...

Its not too bad being lonely
I don't mind the dark
Or the lack of friends..
But all you've got is lonely
In a night that never ends....
After night there comes the day..
Or at least thats the nicest they can say...
It doesnt make me feel any better..
When I watch the stars start to fade..
No more diamonds
Pressed up against ceiling suede...

Poke these pins inside the sky
Let me see a little light
I don't ask for much
Just enough
To let me know the suns still alive...

Close my eyes to see the back of their lids..
I'm "sure" this happens to all the other kids..
I'm "sure" you know whats best for me
Well when I've killed myself you'll see...
Close my eyes to see the back of their lids..
I'm "sure" this happens to all the other kids..
I'm "sure" you know whats best for me
Well when I've killed myself you'll see...
I can honestly say that I'll probably feel much better...

[lightswitchrave]

i like this one the most out of all of yours that i've read, even though it's a pretty dark song. i noticed your alliteration in the chorus... nice.

[BuriedAlive]

I love your little 5th grade rhyming at the end. I don't really like this song. I don't know it isn't very complex. Not sure what keeps me from liking it. I was just kind of bored reading it. Nothing caught my attention during my reading of this.

4/10.

[ForgetThisLoser]

well...thanks...I guess thats all I can say.

[lightswitchrave]

i agree that the end is the weakest part of the song. but the rest is good stuff man. i think that this song deserves to be read over a few times. in my case at least, i read this song over three times before i made my final analysis. i liked it the first time but i didn't fully appreciate it until i reread it. we all have our own tastes i guess...