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nikaidoh
07/18/08, 10:48 PM
This is going to be a semi-retarded/psychotic free associative rant that is mostly babbling but hopefully i will find some kind of truths of myself through some of this.





The double decker bus crashes into the home i used to know when i was still fucking a little girl named suzy but it was purely animal instinct it surprises me the will of fear and finally the apathy that numbs us before death i seem to try to be poetic at my dullest moments and my dullest moments are the times when i have a lack of understanding of what is going on around me in the world jimmy ate in a sloppy second helping of dignity that was lost upon me last week i drove a car into a wall and the wall crumbled underneath the pure will power of my unconscious suicide its hard to die when you fear death and thats the pure irony of life and the cooling breeze of hell and the burning flames of heaven in the back of my van you can meet me as i sip on a glass a tea with johnny and the horses we rode on only deprived us of our sense of fear and left us soft get some born to kill peace and love but only after we destroy an ancient civilization born again under the guidelines of the bible written circa 1930 for propaganda lordy don't leave me all by myself because even though i reject you i still fear the unknown and you are the only known truth even if it is censored onto my brain like a sick kind of re-enactment of a dystopian novel that actually was just a prophecy of things to come kill your idols but herald your false prophets and stop listening to pennywise!!!!

lew_1987
07/19/08, 09:50 AM
I think the sporadic band names in this made it a little goofy. It also could have done with some punctuation.

xidreamofyou32x
07/19/08, 03:24 PM
Yeah, this sounds like it has some good lines in it, but the lack of punctuation makes it hard to read.

h0merg0mez
07/19/08, 04:11 PM
That's a man-sized sentence.

nikaidoh
07/19/08, 09:52 PM
I think the sporadic band names in this made it a little goofy. It also could have done with some punctuation.



yeah, i was trying to be subtle about it until the "kill your idols" bit

de la sympathie
07/19/08, 10:34 PM
I was not feeling this at all. Especially the multiple exclamation points at the end. Plus were you trying to insert some Nirvana lines in the beginning, just changing them up?