random song, blah

[pcyph]

I never thought that I'd get lost,
so far off the beaten path.
But I'm sure I'm not the first,
To ever think like that.

So when we repeat our old memories,
to try and get me back on track,
I hope that no one will see,
how much I resent my past.

All the things,
That I have done
To get me here
They started out fun

But they weren't,
Healthy or smart,
But it doesn't even matter
I ended up following my heart.

A generic love song seems to,
simply roll off my tongue.
But it's harder to write,
When it's been used in all my fun.

And I more I use the muscle,
The more I wear it down.
I should sing and speak softly,
I'm afraid it'll cease to produce sound

And all the things
That I have done
To get me in this state,
They started out fun

But it doesn't matter,
if they were healthy or smart,
I'll stop locking into random kisses
and just follow my heart.

And it seems,
my actions,
are finally catching up with me

And I should heed,
All of the warnings
You all tried to give me

And maybe all the things,
would have ended up better,
Maybe I would have never written
Marshall that letter

And I regret
every single word I put in it
And having sex,
even touching that ugly bitch

I'll probably regret this song too,
I'll probably regret this song too.

It'll hit me some day real soon, I swear
But regrets are good,
They'll help you learn.


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meh, idk. i wanted feedback.

[lew_1987]

Don't be so apathetic about your poetry.

[pcyph]

it's harder for me to get excited about my own stuff

[lew_1987]

But still, if you portray your opinion of your poetry as being that you don't care, why should we get excited about it?

[GhostMachine]

I agree with lew.

[pcyph]

I suppose. But I don't entirely care who gets excited about it or not? Whether I love my writing or hate it, the people who are going to like it are going to like it, and the ones that won't, won't.

[lew_1987]

That is true... But isn't it so much better to give off a positive feeling about your writing? How else are you going to get people interested?

[pcyph]

I guess your right, when I play/record/all that stuff I give off a positive vibe, I guess I just got nervous cause some of the posted stuff on here is so good.


Thanks for slapping me awake, =D

[lew_1987]

I see what you mean... you just need to be more confident with your writing (as long as you are still able to take criticism).