From Breath To Sky, A Broken Bubble Bottle.

[Mitch]

They blew the kiss, oh!
Should it have missed?
The wand I am, you flew away.
Left me wet with cold, and demon spit
I should have known the reflection
Was not what they called, 'illumination!'
For you are a bubble, ah, only a touch to cave in!
'But was it my fault,' I ask at last, finally realizing
For my grip was too round to hold one alive,
Human being, a face and two eyes
Capable of lies
And now making me cry.


The first thread would not let me edit the title of the poem, if you're wondering why I posted, deleted, and then re-posted.

[lew_1987]

I'm not really sure what to say other than I liked it quite a bit. If it was me, I would change some of the punctuation around, but I don't think it's totally necessary.

[Mitch]

Sweet, a reply.

Thank you.

I like the punctuation. I was going for a certain style and whether or not it worked I'm not too sure but I still kind of like how it came out.

[Mitch]

Anyone else?