Don't slip away

[miketrondson]

If his plane goes down over the rockies
And they can never his body
It's what you get
For what he promises won't turn to gold.
And everything I have is on the table.
It's what you want.
It's all I've got.

I tried to tell you, it hurts to be so independant and hurt the ones you love
Because what I have inside my heart
It will tear us all apart
It will make the ground shake
It will make the Earth quake


Chorus
So don't slip away
This is all that you need.
Don't slip away
This is everything I wanted us, to be.

If his plane crashes tonight
Would you be the last thing in his mind.
Because you'd be the last thing on mine
If I slide a red light, D-O-A by a broadside
Would you miss me, would you kiss me goodbye?

Chorus
So don't slip away
This is all that you need.
Don't slip away
This is everything I wanted us, to be.

[lew_1987]

I hate 'heart' analogies. And the ground and Earth references seem a bit unexpected, and don't really seem to fit too much.

[miketrondson]

I hate 'heart' analogies. And the ground and Earth references seem a bit unexpected, and don't really seem to fit too much.

Well, it's still a work in progress. The ground and Earth referrence came directly from a conversation I had with who this song is about.

I do appreciate the input.

[twilightoxoxmcr]

i like this song ^^

[Baby VenomVeins]

I think you missed a word in the second line? It doesn't make sense.
Your chorus is also pretty weak. Try to make it more interesting.

Otherwise, I agreed with what Lew said.

[miketrondson]

i like this song ^^

Thank you!
I think you missed a word in the second line? It doesn't make sense.
Your chorus is also pretty weak. Try to make it more interesting.

Otherwise, I agreed with what Lew said.

I agree the chorus is weak. I've been re-working it. I honestly forgot about this thread. I will post it when I get something to makes it better.

[nkalldayyy]

it flows together really well. i felt like from the first line, i knew i was gonna like it.

[miketrondson]

it flows together really well. i felt like from the first line, i knew i was gonna like it.

Thank you very much.