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gmc14
10/21/04, 04:34 PM
Don’t say you’re sorry, I just don’t care.
It’s hard to miss something that's never really there.
Don’t think it’s easy, because its not,
But caring for you only serves to break my heart.
Don’t be mistaken, I still care for you,
But I’m just really tired of all this shit you put me through.
Why am I so stupid? ... When will I learn?
When you care for someone, you just end up getting burned.
nightjarWI
10/21/04, 06:38 PM
It sounds like pop punk, it isn't bad.
gmc14
10/21/04, 06:51 PM
Haha, "pop punk", thats an honour!!
(thats what most of the stuff I like would likely be classified as).
nightjarWI
10/21/04, 07:00 PM
Honestly it sounds like a pop-punk type of song, there's nothing wrong with that.
gmc14
10/21/04, 07:24 PM
Cool cool, I wrote it like 3 years ago when I liked a chick who had a bf and I was giving up on her... (I ended up going out with the bitch a month later, we all make mistakes)
try_pie
10/21/04, 07:53 PM
cool
gmc14
10/21/04, 09:05 PM
why so little activity in the "Your Poetry" forum? (disappointed)
guitarguy33
10/22/04, 09:14 PM
why so little activity in the "Your Poetry" forum? (disappointed)

Never expect more than one person to respond to the things you post on here. It isn't a very busy forum. No offense but I think your poem is pretty cliche. That isn't really a bad thing because it's practically impossible to not be, but I still thought it was pretty good.
gmc14
10/23/04, 12:07 AM
Never expect more than one person to respond to the things you post on here. It isn't a very busy forum. No offense but I think your poem is pretty cliche. That isn't really a bad thing because it's practically impossible to not be, but I still thought it was pretty good.
*shrugs* thanks for the feedback atleast :)