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wishxfulthinker
10/26/04, 02:52 AM
It's the sound of teeth hitting my stomach
Though muted from the gasp like a gun cock
Firing blood in layers like spilled oil
That fills the shallows of the side-walk

It's the scent of gasoline in my pores
The pours, now a tainted purple collage
A make-shift noose from the sleds of '97
Swaying in the dim of my silent garage

It's the taste of salt as it sweeps my lungs
No fingerprints can be left in the wake
Just a brief synchronize of bubbles
That rise from the body in the lake

It's these thoughts that are not of an ending
But an entire mental new start
If we perish from only the mind
We renew our mental heart

If we fall before we get up

If we choke before we breathe

If we sink before we swim

If we die to learn to believe

loveXhomicide
10/26/04, 02:06 PM
wow.

guitarguy33
10/26/04, 09:51 PM
wow.

Just out of curiosity was that a good or bad wow? Very vivid poem.

loveXhomicide
10/27/04, 07:57 PM
Just out of curiosity was that a good or bad wow? Very vivid poem.
good.

Lueda Alia
10/28/04, 01:44 AM
awesome poem. i love it. <3

wishxfulthinker
10/28/04, 02:08 PM
Thank you!
for more: www.livejournal.com/users/adorei
for the music: www.purevolume.com/lauraevelynx

Take care!

Lueda Alia
10/28/04, 02:42 PM
lol yeah i checked your websites last night. i have yet to listen to your songs though but i will later. :D

JustLikeAMovie
10/29/04, 10:10 PM
Awsome poem, i like. There were a few awkward lines, but i liked it.

burnt_effigy
11/04/04, 07:14 PM
I got chills & I'm not just saying that.

punklet2101
11/06/04, 11:25 PM
Awsome poem, i like. There were a few awkward lines, but i liked it.

What he/she said.

punklet2101
11/06/04, 11:29 PM
Thank you!
for more: www.livejournal.com/users/adorei
for the music: www.purevolume.com/lauraevelynx

Take care!

You sing well.

It sounded good, but did you record the guitar at the same time as the vocals? If you record them seperately, the guitar will probably sound less awkward, the tempo is off a little. But good job

onelastdisaster
11/07/04, 12:07 PM
wow. that's so good.

and i checked out your purevolume site. you're awesome.