need help with a name.....

[sk8er4life88]

i hate the feelin that im losin u
it makes me feel so down n blue
i thought it was over between u n him
no it seems like its all come out to ur rim
so how am i supposed to feel
i jus wish u would take away this peel
The one that covers the inside core
All your making me do is hit the floor?
now im jus lost in a puddle of mixed emotions
so why dont u help me find out some type of notion

i know this poem is sad :( n all but it expresses how i feel right about now i jus wrote it so can u help me with a name???? thanks

[IamNogreatMan]

I like dying, just.

[emo_meets_ska?]

My Last Night (This Is Your Fault)

[Kif]

This isn't about the name, but kinda helpful crit

I liked the beginning of it. The rhyming seemed slightly forced, but that's OK. But at the end the amount of syllables (sp?), especially on these 2 lines:

the one that covers the inside core (9)
cause all ur makin me do is hit this damn floor (12)

It seemed a little off balance with the rest of the song. Why not change it to:

The one that covers the inside core (9)
All your making me do is hit the floor? (10)

Not much, but it was just off-putting to me. But it's your song, I'd like to hear how it's read.

[MaybeOneDay]

AAAAAAAAAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHA. Worst. Fucking. Poem. Ever.

[para ser libre]

AAAAAAAAAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHA. Worst. Fucking. Poem. Ever.

hahaha

"Worst Fuckin Poem Ever" <- good title...suits it

and...................NO....DUDE IT IS NOT SAD, it's is only sad in that you took teh time to post such work...i cant even call it work b/c ork takes effort that is 2nd grade check yes no or maybe bullshit

[Black_And_Red]

Errm these lyrics ain't all that great. I don't know what is is about them, i think it's just cause its too commercial for me even though it's your feelings if that makes sense. Anyway some names i come up with are:

Why You?

I was there (and you weren't)

You made emotions suck

emotions + you = i die

[kimosabe]

"I'm a 14 year old teenage prostitute and this is my badly written crap of a poem" i think it fits the mood of the poem perfectly

[MaybeOneDay]

"I'm a 14 year old teenage prostitute and this is my badly written crap of a poem" i think it fits the mood of the poem perfectly
Haha.

[punklet2101]

hahaha