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beau blood rush
08/27/08, 11:50 AM
kudos to who can work out what its about:


let's hear it for headaches,
and messed-up 'mattress' friendships
only one ring finger left
and one ring finger right
so i spilled into the sunset
with golden browned skin
i confessed into her warm sheets
"dear lord, yr sweet mistake just stole my soul."

if they raised but an eyebrow for this desperate tragedy,
well i'd consider giving in

so pull back the head of my guttered dreams
give me an empty bottled kiss
in the parking lot of my hotel heart

she sold me out my skin
and if she wove me words she can weave them out
so i went east
home to the town with the gossip mouth
cause I'm down on luck
and fed up with the crowds

if they raised but an eyebrow for this desperate tragedy,
well i'd consider giving in

so pull back the head of my guttered dreams
give me an empty bottled kiss
in the parking lot of my hotel heart
cause i'm nothin but a kid
with a talent for stones and sticks
but i can't escape this lovers lonliness

the clock stopped a countdown in blinks
a pale white complexion and rosey red lipped
we're body bag tragic
open ended open casket

so pull back the head of my guttered dreams
give me an empty bottled kiss
in the parking lot of my hotel heart
cause i'm nothin but a kid
with a talent for stones and sticks
but i can't escape this lovers lonliness
carcrashofahart
08/27/08, 01:17 PM
kudos to who can work out what its about:

gonorrhea? LOL

no, seriously, i dig the lyrics a lot! i think lovers loneliness would be an awesome title. :)
beau blood rush
08/27/08, 08:10 PM
haha thanks alot
and its about a women murdering her lover
carcrashofahart
08/27/08, 08:40 PM
dude, you totally gave it away! other people could have guessed.
beau blood rush
08/27/08, 10:14 PM
haha no one really looks into here
especially when ther noobs like me
carcrashofahart
08/27/08, 11:23 PM
a lot of people have looked. just no one is commenting. lurkers, pfft! =P

two people commented on my poem. i figured nothing is better than negative, lol.
hf57
08/28/08, 12:22 AM
theres some good lines in there, but overall its pretty weak.