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BigDskankin
10/31/04, 09:58 AM
Written for a friend who took their life. Please tell me what you think.

All I see is darkness,
as I try to reach out for you,
I don't understand what's happening,
what are all these changes I'm going through?
My body is limp and cold,
my face is wet with tears,
all I hear is mournful sobs
as I lay here full of fear...
Then all of the sudden I remembered,
that last night I took my life,
I felt like no one cared,
so I cut my wrists with a knife...
I remember writing a note,
explaining and telling my goodbyes,
it was something I had to do,
now I regret as I lay here and cry.
Now I'm in a casket,
I see my family and friends slowly walk by,
they have a miserable look on their face,
none of them understands why I died...
My girlfriend now walks by,
she places a red rose in my hand,
one of her tears fall on my face,
I know now she loves me, as right before me she stands...
My best friend is right behind her,
he cries out, "I needed you!",
"Why did you have to die?"
and he softly says "goodbye".
Then as they lower me to the ground,
I realize I'll never see them again,
That was my final goodbye,
my life has come to a bitter end.
I'm a lost soul, a wanderer,
this place is worse than hell.
I thought life on earth was lonely and sad,
but it's worse alone with no one there to tell.
I don't really know why I did it,
it just seemed like the right thing to do,
but now as I look back on it,
I couldn've stayed longer to make anew...
Now I see what I did to my loved one,
and tears fall from my eyes,
They can't talk to or see me,
but I can see them as they mourn and cry.
I thought no one cared,
but now I am proved wrong,
I watch them go on with their lives,
I watch them try to be strong...

silentscreams05
11/01/04, 11:31 PM
wow I really like that. I think you wrote it extremely well and I look forward to reading more of your stuff. I'm sorry about your friend. You must of cared about them a lot.

punklet2101
11/02/04, 04:07 AM
Thank you for posting that. <3

BigDskankin
11/03/04, 02:01 PM
Thank you for posting that. <3
Your welcome, and thank you for the input.

punklet2101
11/03/04, 10:14 PM
I really like it

burnt_effigy
11/04/04, 07:10 PM
That was very well written; well done. I lost a friend to suicide recently as well. :( It helps to know that many people are going through the same thing. Although that is tragic...